http://www.olderelderly.com/im-at-uni-and-write-stories-in-english-dis-is-my-latest-tell-me-what-u-think-it-only-chapter-1-and-bit/ Tue, 28 Jul 2009 02:10:28 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.1 hourly 1 http://www.olderelderly.com/im-at-uni-and-write-stories-in-english-dis-is-my-latest-tell-me-what-u-think-it-only-chapter-1-and-bit/comment-page-1/#comment-1508 mynameis Sun, 26 Jul 2009 12:24:52 +0000 http://www.olderelderly.com/im-at-uni-and-write-stories-in-english-dis-is-my-latest-tell-me-what-u-think-it-only-chapter-1-and-bit/#comment-1508 i think its cool that you're being creative and writing a story bout boxing, thats tight but honestly i didnt read the whole thing because its very hard to read without punctuation marks. also you have some very basic spelling errors such as you wrote "lives" instead of "life's". if you're gonna turn it in its important to pay attention to small details like that. anyway its a good start, but i think if you want people's feedback i would suggest posting smaller amounts and including punctuation :) i think its cool that you’re being creative and writing a story bout boxing, thats tight
but honestly i didnt read the whole thing because its very hard to read without punctuation marks.
also you have some very basic spelling errors such as you wrote “lives” instead of “life’s”.
if you’re gonna turn it in its important to pay attention to small details like that.
anyway its a good start, but i think if you want people’s feedback i would suggest posting smaller amounts and including punctuation

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